Question: Should I keep writing?

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Answer #1:

Yeah,keep writing.It's good.

Answer #2:

I'm mega curious on whats gonna happen. Keep writing. There is a lot of work to be done on it, but it's still really strong.

Answer #3:

This is good.
Keep writing. :)

Answer #4:

yes i would keep reading.

I am a growing writer myself, and I only have one thing to suggest.
It is kind of cliche, their personalities i mean. The quiet girl, the party girl, the popular girl. And spice up the vocabulary a bit, but it is a good idea so far. I do think you should continue writing.

Answer #5:

Well, the story is interesting, yet, you made Jade, almost sound like Mary Sue (close to be too perfect). However, I feel that if you continue the story, she will no longer be a Mary Sue as the story goes on.
Also, from what I have learned from others with my story, sometimes, having the description is best to save later during the story instead of being mentioned right away. It just ruins the story right away.

I think I would love to continue reading and I do like teen love story. Don't stop writing and keep being creative. Here's one advice, no one cares about swearing words in the story and it's normal. You have the right to write down in your own imagination world. ^^

Answer #6:

Hey, that's catching! Tell us what happens next? :D

Answer #7:

Well, here are the good things:
You have an interesting idea to develop in the "we are triplets, but different on the inside" theme.
You accurately describe the dynamics of social interactions and feelings of the sisters.
Using the family picture to introduce the story is creative.

But you are right. It is a little "shaky". There are problems with grammar, sentence structure, spelling and you are using words with which you are unfamiliar.

In the first sentence, you say:
"As I sat in my room and scrolled through the pictures of me and my family from our Florida vacation that we had took during the summer." That's not really a sentence.

It should read something like this:
"I sat in my room and scrolled through the pictures of my family and I from our Florida vacation last summer."

You can't use "As" to begin the sentence the way you have written it. In this case, "As" implies a further action you have not described; as in:
"As I sat looking at pictures, my sister knocked on the door." Two separate actions here; one is "you looking", the other is "sister knocking".

You can't say "me and my family". You have to say "my family and I". Always put yourself last. In this case, the usage is "I", not "me".

You can't say "had took". It is a mixed tense. You have to say "had taken".

The second sentence is good.

In the third, the word is not "mist", it is "midst"; and there are other problems with that sentence.

It goes on like that throughout the story. About every other sentence has some problem like the ones above.

More good news. You can fix these things!

The best idea in the short term is to have a friend who is more advanced in composition help you with structure and grammar.

In the long term, you can read more. Reading will teach you how to write. You will get a feeling for how sentences go together as you read more.
You can write more. This will also help you get a feel for the language.

You should keep writing. You have good ideas and there are some people who write very well who would kill for a good idea for a story. I am one of those people.

I hope this helps. I know it is hard to hear criticism. I did not like it when people took my words apart, but like those who helped me, I mean it to be constructive.

good luck and keep writing





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